Peer Review Sheet

1.The first paragraph introduce the paper's topic and the writers approach but not so much a general conclusion. The first sentences is an attention-getting and i do think is relevant to the question.
2. Thesis statement- Is Alice unconscious behavior could be a representation of displacement and rationalization, a defense mechanism.A way to improve the introduction is to go more in detail about what i would like to talk about about and explain it a tiny more.
3.Structure:Yes, I can identify the main idea in each paragraph but i think looking at all together i would have to change how the paragraphs could possibly connect. The  ideas explored in the paper are generally displacement and rationalization. There is revelant point on each paragraph that it is not convered others paragraphs but i need to go more in dept.Some of the things iam missing is evidence on displacement.
4. yes, there is mistakes such as in paragraph 2 the sents that begins with"Unlike rationalization..."The tone of the essay is formal.
5.As of now my resorces are the psychology book and wikipedia and they are cleearly stated across the paper.
6. The strength of the paper is the evidence and the connections that are made across it.

First draft

Dennisse Pizarro

Have you ever made a connection between your life and the actions you take in it? In Alice in wonderland we get to feel and live her decision by every page we read. Across the book we begin to realize that Alice behavior is hardly unpredictable. Alice unconscious behavior could be a representation of displacement and rationalization, a defense mechanism. As we continue the story, we get a sense of Alice frustration to know who she is and what is happening to her.

According to the Psychology textbook by David Myers, Displacement is an aggressive impulse towards an object or a person that is psychologically more acceptable than the one that aroused the feeling. This is unpredictable, the behavior can be taken on anything but most likely on something that is close or you have a strong interaction with. Unlike rationalization happens unconsciously and it generates a self justifying explanation to hide ourselves from the real reasons of our actions, generally making excuses. This is not so Alice behavior also many of the character that she becomes friends with in this adventure like the Mat Hatter, Rabbit, Mock Turtle and many others. Although, Alice behavior tends to be important so as she has the way to interact but also control people.

Alice, a young girl that at the age of 7 has the opportunity to experience another world, her fantasy brings her to develop her personality in many levels. Her behavior across this world changes and switches in matter of seconds due to the situations she encounters. Her anger for not knowing this new world lets her to think that is okay to displace her anger and find excuses for her actions. Alice encounters with few of the characters like the white rabbit, caterpillar, the duchess, the queen of hearts and a few others make her confuse or which way to go and how to react.

 “Rationalization is in which perceived controversial behaviors or feelings that are explained in a rational or logical manner to avoid the true explanation” by an online article. We can see it clearly in page 5 of the book of Alice in Wonderland by John Tenniel while she approaches to herself saying   “And what an ignorant little girl she’ll think me for asking! No, I’ll never do to ask: perhaps I shall see it written up somewhere”, in this situation her ability to accept her mistake is already portrait, as she doesn’t say it’s my fault for making thin type of question but no it should have been written first. Her potential of accepting her actions start in the beginning and move her way across her whole story.

                Alice thoughts focus on her and how she was feeling plenty of times, it seems to portray that the world revolved around only her. This is one of the reasons when the perspective of her behavior comes down to rationalization, as shown in page 110 when the author clearly states “this piece of rudeness was more than Alice could bear: she got up in great disgust, and walked off”, this happened because her interruption when the Dormouse was saying his story. Alice had the tendency to blame orders for her actions, the Mat Hatter in this situation was just trying to let her know about her mistake but instead she blames them for being rude instead of saying I did a mistake.

                The unconscious behavior leads Alice to making mistakes in life. Rationalization and Displacement can be related at the end. Due to displacing the anger of another can let us to blame other for the actions we did. For example the queen in another hand she will cut off people’s heads to take her own anger out and then blame them for her action of doing it.

Proposal Written

 The dream theories focus on many aspects and many fields but I will focus on the introduction of the dream theory and why we dream. Even though this story it is not portrayed as a dream I like to think of it as if it was. My paper will focus on alice in wonderland as a dream and why we dream? how we dream?. Also at the connection of the ways the perception of adults can affect how she develops  and creates this world of her dreams. Also how the the characters represent the adults in the reality. On of my sources in the psychology textbook .

     

About Me

Like all you guys know my name is Dennisse Pizarro, 19, Ecuadorian and italian. I was born in ecuador and raised over there until i was 10 and than came to this country. Iam the youngeast of 3.I live with my parents and my sibilling  and my grandmother. I love playing soccer and spending time with my family. Since i was little i was encouraged to do good in school and that's how so my first priority became my education. I currently want to be a social worker and work with adolences. I  would say that dancing is my biggest passion besides soccer. I currently work in a immigration office in the Lower East Side that's where i got intrested in social work, Iam the secretary.I am a graduated of Cathedral High School, catholic high school in midtown. All my life except from 5th and 6th grade i been in private school.As of the many things I do iam also part of a youth group in St.Teresa's church of the Lower Manhatthan.

I love what I do in my every day life, is something different everyday, the clients the come in to my job and just seen that a smile can help them have a better day meaning making a change at least in one person life. I am a very optimistic person and like to see the things in the bright side even though you feel everything is wrong.

The change of coming to a new country really affect my life, I didn't know the language, and everything looked different even the way people would walk. Learning the language wasn't hard but living with two cultures is difficult. In my house there are rules that need to be follow and i think because of them(my parents) i am what i have become.